Question by ¢αѕѕαη∂яα ♥: Another alt version for the beginning of my novel. :p first draft. opinions? Advice?
I sat high on a cushioned stool, tapping my fingers against the cold, hard granite countertop of the greeting table. My head rested on my palm as my eyes explored around the room. I checked on the clock every now and again. It seemed like time was moving incredibly slowly and painfully. Every minute I was driving deeper and deeper into what seemed to be endless boredom. I stared at the wall where the clock hung. I couldn’t believe I had been at work for five hours and hardly anyone had come to dine. There were only two parties eating at our restaurant at that moment. While all of my other co-workers were lazing away in the cozy employee’s lounge, I had to fill in for the hostess who was late again. I sighed deeply hoping that either the hostess would walk through that door or some people would, so that I could do my job. The slow days were the worst.

Suddenly, I had a great craving for some chocolate crepes. My stomach growled. I couldn’t remember the last time I had them here. They were the best and with my employee’s discount, I always got them half-off. Nothing tastes better than a break from work and half-off chocolate crepes. I couldn’t wait until my lunch break. Realizing that it was only half an hour away, I smiled to myself.

Without warning, some customers walked in through the French doors. I immediately snapped out of my thoughts. The cutest elderly couple I had ever seen approached me with beaming faces. “Two?” I asked them, putting on my sweet, waitressy grin.

“Yes,” the man replied in a humble tone, and then grabbed his wife’s hand.

Aww, I thought to myself.

I slid two menus from a shelf in the table and curled them into my arms. “Right this way,” I told them. I picked out the best table in the place for them to sit. It was right beside a window with the perfect view. Our restaurant was situated right next to the beautiful park. At that angle, they would be able to see the amazing, gleaming lake.

“Oh, this is lovely. Thank you,” the woman gasped as they sat themselves down.

“You’re welcome, madam,” I said as I placed down their menus in front of them. “You’re waiter will be with you shortly.”

It’s not nearly done. That’s just the beginning.
that’s good for you, because this story is gonna end up being a fantasy. thanks :]

Best answer:

Answer by swiftstar89
wow thats pretty good. normally stories like these about people in the real world bore me, because i love to read about fantasy, but yours was actually different and interesting to read. i would say 9/10. fantastic!! :]

g2g, im going 2 movies… post some more, i wanna read it! ;]

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